The table below shows the monthly expenditure of an average Australian family in 1991 and 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words
The table below shows the monthly
expenditure
of an average Australian
family in 1991 and 2001. In 1991, Australian
family expenditure
on other goods and services highest
on the top, the second is food Add a missing verb
was highest
about
155$, the third is housing at 95$ Change preposition
at about
while
electricity and water at 75$ and transport at 70$. Last
one is clothing about 30$ the smallest in the chart, which is they spend a little. In 2001, these things had Change the article
The last
change
dramatically. Spending on electricity and water Change the verb form
changed
was increase
Change the verb form
was increasing
was increased
in
from 75$ to 120$. Next was other goods and services went up from 250$ to 270$. Change preposition
apply
Then
was
housing and food had increased Unnecessary verb
apply
5$
for each one. Change preposition
by 5$
However
, spending on clothing and transport was reduced from 30$ to 20$ and 70$ to 45$. Especially expenditure
on clothing and transport had change
considerably in Australia. Change the verb form
changed
Finally
Add a comma
Finally,
Australian
expenditure
on other goods and services the most and the least is clothing. Total
Correct article usage
The total
Australian
dollar
per month in 1991 Fix the agreement mistake
dollars
was went
up in 2001 from 675$ to 715$.Change the verb form
went
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