The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital between 1960,1980 and 2000.

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The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital between 1960,1980 and 2000. In 1960,the hospital was built close to a main road and next to

shopping

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the shopping

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centre

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.A large area behind the hospital was turned into a

car

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park

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Beside

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apply

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the

car

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parking

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parking,

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there was Farmland. By 1980,the shopping

centre

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had been knocked down in order to make way for two additional hospital buildings which became

cancer

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a cancer

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centre

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and pharmacy.

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,the Farmland had been replaced by Nursing

School

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. In 2000,the main hospital building remained unchanged,but the cancer

centre

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was expanded to cover

entire

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the entire

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nursing

school

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,the

car

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park

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was split up into two so that it provided a smaller

car

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park

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and

small

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a small

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nursing

school

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. During

this

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period, the hospital has increased in size and,

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to a new nursing

school

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, a cancer

centre

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has been created and extended. As

the

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result,the capacity of the

car

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park

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has been reduced by

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half.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words centre, car, park, school with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

157 words

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The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital between 1960,1980 and 2000.

Some feel governments should invest in preserving minority languages, while others feel this is not a good use of resources. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

For some people learning in a group is the most effective way, while others prefer one-on-one instructions. Discuss both views. What is your opinion?

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