Millions of dollars are spent on space research every year. Some people argue that the money should be spent on improving living standards on Earth. Do you agree or disargee?
Nowadays, a lot of
money
is invested to
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in
research
space
. Major of people believe that the
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money
should be spent on make
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making
quality
of Add an article
the quality
life
on Earth
better. I agree partly with this
opinion and will explain in the following paragraph.
The first thing must be mentioned that living standard is one of the important thing
that people have to spend more Change to a plural noun
things
money
on improving. Human is living on the Earth
and the Earth
is our home, we have to improve our home. Therefore
, we can improve in
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which are supporting
people in their Wrong verb form
that support
life
. Fix the agreement mistake
lives
For instance
, healthcare is one of the problem in many countries, the government do not pay attention on
that field and it make Change preposition
to
the
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life
in that country worsen
.
Another point from my view Replace the word
worse
that
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is that
research
space
is now a scientific subject. Some exploration in space
can be useful to support us in improve
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improving
the
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life
on the
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Earth
. Because it is science, thus
every achievement can Rephrase
apply
be apply
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be applied
for
another science field or Change preposition
to
the
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life
. The advantages it bringing
can be very large Wrong verb form
brings
due to
the money
that they invest in if it is successful. Take the USA as a
example, Change the article
an
where
spend a large amount of Correct word choice
which
money
on space
research
and that country have
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has
create
some scientific achievement like Change the verb form
created
the
satellite can bring 4G and 5G.
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To conclude
, spending money
on space
research
can have a lot of benefits but we also
pay attention on
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to
life
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