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Band 4

Millions of dollars are spent on space research every year. Some people argue that the money should be spent on improving living standards on Earth. Do you agree or disargee?

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Nowadays, a lot of
money
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 is invested
to
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research
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space
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. Major of people believe that
the
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money
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 should be spent on
make
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quality
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 of
life
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 on
Earth
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 better. I agree partly with
this
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 opinion and will explain in the following paragraph. The first thing must be mentioned that living standard is one of the important
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 that people have to spend more
money
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 on improving. Human is living on the
Earth
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 and the
Earth
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 is our home, we have to improve our home.
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, we can improve
in
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several services
which are supporting
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 people in their
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life
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.
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, healthcare is one of the problem in many countries, the government do not pay attention
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 that field and it make
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life
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 in that country
worsen
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. Another point from my view
that
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research
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space
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 is now a scientific subject. Some exploration in
space
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 can be useful to support us in
improve
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the
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life
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 on
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Earth
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. Because it is science,
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thus
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every achievement can
be apply
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for
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 another science field or
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life
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. The advantages it
bringing
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 can be very large
due to
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 the
money
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 that they invest in if it is successful. Take the USA as
a
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where
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 spend a large amount of
money
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 on
space
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research
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 and that country
have
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create
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 some scientific achievement like
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satellite can bring 4G and 5G.
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, spending
money
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 on
space
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research
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 can have a lot of benefits but we
also
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 pay attention
on
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 the
life
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 standard.

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Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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