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Online, people write product reviews and opinions about services. Is it a good thing or bad thing?

#people #product #reviews #services
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Today, when people buy a huge amount of goods
by
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 the internet, it is undeniable that online sales and services become
essential
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an essential
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 part of our
life
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lives
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. In
this
 case, some people argue that writing
a online reviews
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online reviews
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 about
product
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products
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 is beneficial,
while
 others consider it negatively for business.
This
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advantages
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the advantages
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 and disadvantages of it, but I tend to think that
benefits
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the benefits
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 outweigh
drawbacks
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the drawbacks
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. One of the main positives of online feedback is the
improving
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 of
service
 and product quality, because customers before spending their money on internet sales, usually refer to other
consumers
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consumers'
consumer's
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opinion
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opinions
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.
For instance
, personally, I used to call the cab by phone, and I was not satisfied with the
service
.
However
, when the company created the app with the comments for feedback, the
service
 quality positively changed. Presently, we can see that the companies that emphasize
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their
customers
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customer's
customers'
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 opinions doing well,
therefore
 it could
helps
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help
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 to improve the
qualty
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quality
 of products and services.
On the other hand
, some people claim that it could be affected negatively on businesses. One of the main
reason
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reasons
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 behind
that is
 that competitors could write
a fake comments
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a fake comment
fake comments
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 and ruin their reputation. Certainly, it is not possible to verify every review. In conclusion, taking
eveything
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everything
 mentioned into account I would argue that writing online comments about
product
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a product
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 or
service
 could be
beneficial
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a beneficial
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options
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 for consumers,
although
 it could lead to negative
consiquences
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consequences
 between competitors.
However
, I tend to think that
advantages
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the advantages
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 outweigh
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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.
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