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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, andmake comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, andmake comparisons where relevant.
#households #income #summarise #information #features #andmake #comparisons
It's not a secret that
the
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every country in the world
have
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has
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 many
households
. The United States of America isn't
exception
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an exception
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. We have a graph that gives
the
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apply
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information about the
number
 of
households
 in the US by their
every year
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yearly
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income
 in 2007, 2011 and 2015. The first part of statistics about the
households
 in 2007. A quarter of
hundred
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a hundred
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 million
households
 had
income
 less than
twenty five
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twenty-five
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thousand
 United States Dollars.
Number
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A number
The number
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 of
households
 with better
income
, just between $25.000 and half a hundred
thousand
 USD, was more than 27
millions
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million
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.
Income
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The income
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 of around 20 million
households
are
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started from $50.000 and reached
to
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more than seventy
thousands
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thousand
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.
This
 was the index for 2007. If we talk about 2011 we will see that the
number
 of
households
 with very different incomes
in
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is
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 almost equal.
Households
 with
income
 around
hundred
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a hundred
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thousand
 dollars
was
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were
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 the
last
 in 2011 by their quantity. Families with more than
hundred
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a hundred
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thousand
 dollars practically reached the
number
 30
millions
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million
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, but not took it
at
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in
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 full. The graph
of
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for
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 the year
of
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2015
is looking
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looks
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 different than any others. Of
course
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course,
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 there is a
simillar
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similar
points
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,
such
 as the
number
 of families with
income
 less than half a
thousand
 USD, but,
on the other
hand
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hand,
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 quantity of
housekeepings
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housekeeping
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 with
income
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an income
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more
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of more
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 than $100.000 just rocketed to the value of 32
millions
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million
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 or so. In conclusion,
this
 bunch of statistics is only about the United States. If
we'll
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we
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 speak about any other countries we definitely will have
an
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another information and other numbers.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words households, number, income, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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