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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002,

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002,
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the bar chart gives us information about the total
phone
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number of phone
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 calls in England , between 1995 and 2002
overall
 ,it can be seen that the amount of calling with local by
fixedline
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fixed line
fixed-line
 was really popular over the period more than others ,
however
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,
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calls with national and international
as well as
 by mobile increased , refers to the most
relevent
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relevant
calling which was local calls , the levels of making
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the
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phone
 in 1995 stood at 70 minutes
that
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which
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 was the highest
numbers
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number
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compearing
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comparing
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to others in the same year,
although
this
 number was
incearse
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increased
increase
 steadily , after
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the
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next 4 years in 1999
this
 level
peacked
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peaked
packed
at 90 minutes . after the following
years
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years,
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 the quantity of telephone calls
were
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was
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decline
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declined
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greadually
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gradually
. regards to
others kind
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other kinds
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 of calling
such
 as
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a
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call with domestic and International , the amount of
phone
 calls rose slowly during the period 1995 and 2002 , if we
noted
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note
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individuals have used
mobile
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the mobile
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phone
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phones
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more and more ,
for instance
 in 1995 citizens made a
phone
 by their
phone
 just for
abour
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about
labour
 2
minuts
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minutes
 that was the lowest numbers, even though
this
 amount was dramatic jump to 50
billions
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billion
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minutes in 2002 .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number
  • minutes
  • telephone calls
  • UK
  • divided into
  • categories
  • from
  • to
  • overall
  • increased significantly
  • local fixed-line calls
  • accounted for
  • largest proportion
  • throughout
  • period
  • international calls
  • highest rate of growth
  • experiencing
  • sharp increase
  • national long-distance calls
  • remained relatively stable
  • slight decline
  • towards
  • end
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