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The tables show the average salaries of graduates and non-graduates in the UK in 2010

The tables show the average salaries of graduates and non-graduates in the UK in 2010
The tables compare the average salaries of people with a degree and people without a degree in the United Kingdom in 2010. In general, the average salary of
graduates
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 was much higher than that of
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graduates
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.
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, both degree holders and undergraduates, aged between 32 and 52 years old received the highest salaries. The average salary for UK
graduates
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 in 2010 was 54,000
pounds
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, which was almost twice as high as for
non-
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graduates
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, at 29,000
pounds
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. In 2010,
graduates
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 aged 22 were paid the lowest salaries, at only 24,000
pounds
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,
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 the figure for those aged 52 was the highest, at just over 34,000
pounds
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. Ranked second and third were 32 and 42-year-old people who finished college, and received 32,200 and 33,500
pounds
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 respectively.
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,
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 aged 62 were paid 29,900
pounds
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. In terms of
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graduates
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, the highest amount of money was paid to 32 and 42-year-olds, at 19,100
pounds
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 each, which was only slightly higher than the figure for 52-year-old
non-
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graduates
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, at 18,600
pounds
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. The lowest-paid
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graduates
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 were the youngest and oldest age groups at 15,200
pounds
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 for 62-year-olds
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 and 14,300 for 22-year-olds.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graduates, non-graduates, pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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