The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004.
The given bar chart illustrates the results of statistical data about the several categories
age
to spending money
for
consumer needs Change preposition
on
such
as Food and Drink, Restaurant
and Fix the agreement mistake
Restaurants
Hotel
, and Entertaiment
in the UK by 2004.
Correct your spelling
Entertainment
Overall
, it can clearly be seen that the Food and Drink needs was
Change the verb form
were
incerease
Correct your spelling
increase
increased
age
by age
. In contrast
, the total amount for Restaurant
and Hotel
almost decrease for each getting older. Furthermore
, the percentage of the
Correct article usage
apply
Entertaiment
Correct your spelling
Entertainment
was
almost decreased Unnecessary verb
apply
to
each getting older.
In terms of the consumer needs by several categories, Change preposition
with
which
the highest Correct pronoun usage
apply
increased
was Replace the word
increase
a
Food and Drink categories; were start from Correct article usage
the
the
approximately 7 per Correct article usage
apply
cent
and grow
to 13 per Wrong verb form
grew
cent
, 17 per cent
, 20 per cent
, and 23 per cent
for age
under 30, aged Fix the agreement mistake
ages
range
30 to 41, aged from 46 until 60, aged range
61 until 75, and aged more than 76, respectively. In addition
, the amount for entertaiment
needs Correct your spelling
entertainment
also
had increase
from 7 per Change the verb form
increased
cent
to 23 per cent
in range
aged 61 to 75. Correct article usage
the range
Nevertheless
, the total of spending money
in
aged more than 76 had Change preposition
apply
decrease
to 13 per Change the verb form
decreased
cent
.
Regarding the decreased number of spending money
for consumer need
Fix the agreement mistake
needs
such
as Restaurant
and Fix the agreement mistake
Restaurants
Hotel
. Meanwhile, the Restaurant
and Fix the agreement mistake
Restaurants
Hotel
had Fix the agreement mistake
Hotels
a
fluctuative bar charts, Correct article usage
apply
which
the data Correct your spelling
with
start
from 14 per Wrong verb form
starting
cent
for aged
under 30 and as the Correct pronoun usage
those aged
citizen
get older until aged Fix the agreement mistake
citizens
range
61 to 75 decreased to 3 per cent
. On the other hand
, the aged more than 76 had
interested Verb problem
were
to
spending Change preposition
in
money
for
Change preposition
on
the
Correct article usage
apply
Restaurant
and Fix the agreement mistake
Restaurants
Hotel
, where the consequence they had
Verb problem
apply
increase
to 7 per Change the verb form
increased
cent
from
Change preposition
of
total
amount of Add an article
the total
residents
expenditure.Change noun form
residents'
resident's
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, money, restaurant, hotel, cent, range with synonyms.
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