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The graph shows the number of visitors to a variety of art galleries in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and repo fling the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the number of visitors to a variety of art galleries in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and repo fling the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The data illustrates the
amount
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number
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 of guests to a collection of art galleries in several countries in 2011.
Overall
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,
Louvre
Correct article usage
the Louvre
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Use synonyms
museum
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Museum
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 in France attracted more people in the period given. Followed by
Metropolitan
Correct article usage
the Metropolitan
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Museum
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 in
USA
Correct article usage
the USA
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 and
British
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the British
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Museum
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 in
UK
Correct article usage
the UK
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.
Whereas
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, the least number of visitors
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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National
Correct article usage
the National
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Museum
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 of Korea,
Moseo
Correct your spelling
Museo
 del Prado in Spain and
State
Correct article usage
the State
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 Hermitage in
Rusia
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Russia
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. Louvre in France became the peak season which surely had the most number of
attandees
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attendees
 at about 8.9 million
of
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apply
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people.
Furthermore
Linking Words
,
Metropolitan
Correct article usage
the Metropolitan
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Museum
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 in
USA
Correct article usage
the USA
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 and
British
Correct article usage
the British
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Museum
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 in
UK
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the UK
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succed
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succeeded
to gain
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in gaining
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 about 6.0 and 5.8 million
of
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apply
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visitors respectively.
On the other hand
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, the amount of attendance was
one-thirds
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one-third
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 lower in the remaining
museum
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 compared to
Louvre
Correct article usage
the Louvre
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Museum
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. Around 3.2, 3.0, and 2.9 million
of
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apply
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people were recorded to stop by the National
Museum
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 of Korea, Museo del Prado in Spain, and State Hermitage in
Rusia
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Russia
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 respectively.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words museum with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • visitor numbers
  • fluctuations
  • peak season
  • off-peak season
  • trend
  • visitor demographics
  • attendance
  • special exhibition
  • promotional campaign
  • footfall
  • gallery capacity
  • cultural attraction
  • art enthusiasts
  • exhibit
  • statistical comparison
  • tourist attraction
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