More and more people are migrating to cities in search of a better life, but city life can be extremely difficult. Explain some of the difficulties of living in a city. How can governments make urban life better for everyone?

In the past few decades, people
are
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more and more interested in relocation, particularly from a village to a
city
.
This
migration may be extremely challenging for each individual and governments may invest in improving
the
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urban life in several ways. On one hand, living in a
city
may be complicated
due to
not few factors. These factors may make
the
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living there much more difficult than
on
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in
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the rural areas.
Firstly
, living in a
city
is much more expensive compared to living in a village,
for instance
, the fees that residents must pay there are higher.
Secondly
, the crowded traffic in the
city
may be another bothering factor to the citizens which harry to their jobs
at
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the morning,
Thirdly
the high pollution ratio may
also
have a late onset effect on the individual's health,
for example
, it is known the Asthma has a higher incidence in cities.
On the other hand
, many of the
mentioned above
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difficulties can be managed by the governments which may ensure a bitter life quality for the people.
Firstly
, by decreasing the fees,
secondly
by improving the public transport validity and
thirdly
by
rising
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raising
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the awareness of citizens about the importance of lowering
pollution
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the pollution
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ratio by reducing
using
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the use of
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harmful materials
such
as plastics. All these actions may sound easy but are complicated to implement because they demand
a huge quantities
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huge quantities
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of money and a long time of planning.
To conclude
, living in a
city
is extremely attractive, but at the same time, is very expensive and complicated in different ways. Governments should assume the responsibility of creating
a
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better life conditions for residents
by
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through
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long term
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plans and different awareness campaigns.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urbanization
  • Metropolis
  • Rapid urban growth
  • Megacity
  • Urban sprawl
  • Housing affordability
  • Infrastructure development
  • Public transportation
  • Traffic congestion
  • Pollution
  • Noise pollution
  • Green spaces
  • Job market
  • Social cohesion
  • Community engagement
  • Safety measures
  • Crime prevention
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