More and more people are migrating to cities in search of a better life, but city life can be extremely difficult. Explain some of the difficulties of living in a city. How can governments make urban life better for everyone?
In the past few decades, people
are
more and more interested in relocation, particularly from a village to a Wrong verb form
have become
city
. This
migration may be extremely challenging for each individual and governments may invest in improving the
urban life in several ways.
On one hand, living in a Correct article usage
apply
city
may be complicated due to
not few factors. These factors may make the
living there much more difficult than Correct article usage
apply
on
the rural areas. Change preposition
in
Firstly
, living in a city
is much more expensive compared to living in a village, for instance
, the fees that residents must pay there are higher. Secondly
, the crowded traffic in the city
may be another bothering factor to the citizens which harry to their jobs at
the morning, Change preposition
in
Thirdly
the high pollution ratio may also
have a late onset effect on the individual's health, for example
, it is known the Asthma has a higher incidence in cities.
On the other hand
, many of the mentioned above
difficulties can be managed by the governments which may ensure a bitter life quality for the people. Correct word choice
above-mentioned
Firstly
, by decreasing the fees, secondly
by improving the public transport validity and thirdly
by rising
the awareness of citizens about the importance of lowering Correct your spelling
raising
pollution
ratio by reducing Correct article usage
the pollution
using
harmful materials Wrong verb form
the use of
such
as plastics. All these actions may sound easy but are complicated to implement because they demand a huge quantities
of money and a long time of planning.
Correct the article-noun agreement
huge quantities
a huge quantity
To conclude
, living in a city
is extremely attractive, but at the same time, is very expensive and complicated in different ways. Governments should assume the responsibility of creating a
better life conditions for residents Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
by
Change preposition
through
long term
plans and different awareness campaigns.Add a hyphen
long-term
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