The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealth if eaten too much.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealth if eaten too much.
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The pie charts demonstrate the proportions of three ingredients (
sodium
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, saturated fat, added
sugar
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) by meal in America. These nutrients are harmful to the body if they are over-consumed.
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, meals are categorized into four groups, which are breakfast, lunch,
dinner
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and snacks.
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,
dinner
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has the highest percentages of
sodium
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and saturated fat but it loses its first
place
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to snacks when it comes to added
sugar
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. In detail,
dinner
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has the highest intake of
sodium
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and saturated fat with 43% and 37% and lunch takes
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second
place
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with 29% and 26% respectively in both
ingredient
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. Snacks take
dinner
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’s first
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with
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the highest
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percentages of added
sugar
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with 42% and
dinner
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takes
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second
place
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with 23%.
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, breakfast is the
healtiest
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healthiest
meal among them. USA citizens'
sodium
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,
sugar
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and saturated fats intake during
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breakfast is comparatively lower, around 14-16% each time.
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