Today high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of society in which they are sold. To extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, a
big
number of commercials of popular consumer Correct word choice
large
products
describe the advertising power instead
of the actual needs of the people
in which they are sold. I strongly agree with this
context, it is caused by several reasons.
Firstly
, people
prefer to follow the newest trends in social media
platforms advertisement
. There are a lot of Fix the agreement mistake
platform advertisements
media
that have become popular to use in society. For instance
tiktok
. Before the feature of Correct your spelling
TikTok
tik tok
shops was banned in my country, Correct your spelling
TikTok
Tiktok
became Correct your spelling
TikTok
the
one of the easiest applications that could upload Change the article
apply
photos
and videos
, sell
and purchase the product. Many entrepreneurs and resellers utilise the Correct word choice
and sell
tiktok
as a promotion place by uploading several Correct your spelling
TikTok
photos
and videos
that are related with
the particular Change preposition
to
products
that they sold
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sell
,
and Remove the comma
apply
attached
a shopping link on Wrong verb form
attaching
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the tiktok
tiktok
shop feature. Correct your spelling
TikTok
This
has become big
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a big
advantages
for entrepreneurs, Fix the agreement mistake
advantage
moreover
sometimes if the videos
and photos
go viral and raise a million comments of
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from
people
that
include their testimonials after using the particular product, it will attract the audiences that have viewed these Correct pronoun usage
who
videos
or photos
advertisements become curious and rapidly check out the products
instead
of consider about the main needs that must fulfil in daily life.
Secondly
, Some brands also
collaborate with the
influencers or famous Correct article usage
apply
people
on social media
to promote their products
. The advantages of technology makes
everything that we made before Change the verb form
make
become
viral, it causes some Change the verb form
becoming
people
to become popular and have millions of followers. Several brands harness this
situation as a “golden moment” to offer
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collaboration
with those Replace the word
collaborate
people
in order to ask them to introduce and promote their products
to their audience or followers through live video
or Fix the agreement mistake
videos
feed
and stories. It Fix the agreement mistake
feeds
also
was a big possibility to cooperate with people
that
have occupations in the entertainment world, to advertise their commercial Correct pronoun usage
who
product
through film or series to attract the consumer rather than thinking about what the actual need that society has to purchase.
In summary, I strongly believe that advertisement Fix the agreement mistake
products
is playing
a crucial role in the commercial field, it shows that there are many Wrong verb form
plays
people
that
prefer to buy Correct pronoun usage
who
the
goods rather than Correct article usage
apply
the
basic needs. It is caused by several reasons Correct article usage
apply
such
as people
prefer
to follow the newest trends in social Wrong verb form
preferring
media
platforms
advertisement and some brands Fix the agreement mistake
platform
also
collaborate with the
influencers or famous Correct article usage
apply
people
on social media
to promote their products
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