Today high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of society in which they are sold. To extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, a

big

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number of commercials of popular consumer

products

describe the advertising power

instead

of the actual needs of the

people

in which they are sold. I strongly agree with

this

context, it is caused by several reasons.

Firstly

people

prefer to follow the newest trends in social

media

platforms advertisement

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platform advertisements

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. There are a lot of

media

that have become popular to use in society.

For instance

tiktok

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TikTok

. Before the feature of

tik tok

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TikTok

shops was banned in my country,

Tiktok

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TikTok

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became

the

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apply

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one of the easiest applications that could upload

photos

and

videos

sell

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and sell

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and purchase the product. Many entrepreneurs and resellers utilise the

tiktok

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TikTok

as a promotion place by uploading several

photos

and

videos

that are related

with

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the particular

products

that they

sold

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and

attached

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attaching

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a shopping link on

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the tiktok

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tiktok

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TikTok

shop feature.

This

has become

big

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a big

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advantages

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advantage

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for entrepreneurs,

moreover

sometimes if the

videos

and

photos

go viral and raise a million comments

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from

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people

that

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who

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include their testimonials after using the particular product, it will attract the audiences that have viewed these

videos

photos

advertisements become curious and rapidly check out the

products

instead

of consider about the main needs that must fulfil in daily life.

Secondly

, Some brands

also

collaborate with

the

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influencers or famous

people

on social

media

to promote their

products

. The advantages of technology

makes

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everything that we made before

become

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becoming

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viral, it causes some

people

to become popular and have millions of followers. Several brands harness

this

situation as a “golden moment” to

offer

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apply

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collaboration

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with those

people

in order to ask them to introduce and promote their

products

to their audience or followers through live

video

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videos

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feed

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feeds

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and stories. It

also

was a big possibility to cooperate with

people

that

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who

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have occupations in the entertainment world, to advertise their commercial

product

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products

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through film or series to attract the consumer rather than thinking about what the actual need that society has to purchase. In summary, I strongly believe that advertisement

is playing

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a crucial role in the commercial field, it shows that there are many

people

that

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who

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prefer to buy

the

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apply

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goods rather than

the

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basic needs. It is caused by several reasons

such

people

prefer

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preferring

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to follow the newest trends in social

media

platforms

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platform

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advertisement and some brands

also

collaborate with

the

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apply

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influencers or famous

people

on social

media

to promote their

products

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6Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
35Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

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Today high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of society in which they are sold. To extent do you agree or disagree?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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