This is a technology area. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

In
this
digital
era
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human beings are unable to perform most tasks without the aid of
technology
.
Hence
, it is said that
people
are living in a place
with
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full of
technology
.
This
essay totally agrees with that statement as
technolgy
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technology
has become a vital role in
everyones
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everyone's
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life
and it enhances
peoples
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people's
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lives in many ways.
To begin
with, throughout the past few
decades
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technology
has evolved enormously to a certain level
which
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in which
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the
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apply
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mankind would not make any personal tasks into a reality
with out
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without
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technical assistance.
Latest
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The latest
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innovative products have
concored
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covered
each and every
aspects
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aspect
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of
works
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work
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such
as cleaning utensils, online lessons, google maps for driving,
vehicals
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vehicles
, building constructions and many more.
For instance
, during the covid
out
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outbreak
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break
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break,
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people
who were isolated at home
stay
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stayed
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connected with their loved ones only because of the
avaiabilty
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availability
of technological innovations.
Therefore
,
life
has become mostly connected to the
technolgy
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technology
as a whole.
In addition
,
technolgy
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technology
enables
people
to live a quality
life
. It is obvious that the early
life
of human beings
were with
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is
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full of heavy
works
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work
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and it
consumed
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lot
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of time to perform tasks.
However
, with the sophisticated
equipments
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invented by
people
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people,
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most
works
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work
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canbe
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can be
done in an
instance
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nowadays.
For example
, robotics applied with AI
technology
currently being
performing
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performed
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to the same extent
of
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a
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as
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human
being
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beings
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such
as hospitality and health sectors. In conclusion, currently,
technology
can be seen
every where
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everywhere
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as
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apply
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for
it's
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its
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versatile use and
it' s
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its
service
human
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to human
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beings to enhance their lives.
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