In some countries, health care and education are only partially funded by the government. Some people argue that the government should be responsible for covering the full cost of these services. Do you support or oppose the opinion? Explain your position.

Health
care
and
education
are vital pillars of a
country
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development and productivity. People hold different views about whether it’s the responsibility of the
government
to fully fund both the
health
care
and
education
sector
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sectors
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. Some agree that
health
care
and
education
should be fully funded by the
government
while
there are others that disagree with it. In my opinion, I support that
health
care
and
education
cost
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should be fully funded by the
government
and my reasons will be stated below.
Firstly
,
government
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are saddled with the responsibility of making sure that their citizens are comfortable and productive.
This
can only be possible when there is adequate provision of basic amenities, of which
education
and
health
care
services are among. A
country
with a
well developed
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care
and
education
system will bring about attainment among its
citizen
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citizens
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and
also
enhance social productivity.
For
instance
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when the
citizen
don’t
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have to worry about their
health
knowing fully well the
government
has
cater
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for free
health
care
delivery for it masses,
this
will enable them to be able to go to the hospital on time when they are sick without the fear of not
been
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able to afford the payment.
Also
,
enabling
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them to get treatment on time without the condition aggravating.
In
addition
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such
citizen
would be happy, allowing them to contribute their own quota to the
country
happily, paying their taxes effectively and working fully for the growth of the
country
.
Secondly
, a quality
education
made free for all will empower the
citizen
.
This
will prevent them from being a liability to the
country
but rather a useful resource to the
country
, increasing the workforce capacity of the
country
.
Furthermore
, free
education
for all will give both the rich and poor equal opportunity and enable both to be equally educated.
Therefore
allowing more people who would not have been able to go to school because of their financial capacity all to have a chance to be educated.
In
addition
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it will give all citizens a
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at the employment market which would not be possible if some are not able to provide for their
education
.
Likewise
with free
education
amenity
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amenities
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also
comes entrepreneurship empowerment. In conclusion, a fully funded
health
care
and educational system won’t only benefit the citizens but
also
the
country
at large. There will be so much productivity when individuals are healthy, educated and able to work.
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