Some people believe that capital punishment should not be used. Others, however, argue that it should be allowed for the most serious crimes. Discuss both views and give your opinion
Death
penalty should be given to hard-core criminals
who are ant-social
elements. Correct your spelling
anti-social
On the other hand
, one can say that death
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the death
sentence
is not the only solution to any crime
committed but also
the heinous criminals
could be brought to justice by sentencing them for life
imprisonment
. This
essay examines the advantages and disadvantages of awarding a person
with a death
sentence
who wronged the
society.
Correct article usage
apply
To begin
with, a sentence
of life
in prison is disproportionate to the capital crime
.The wrongdoers who commit heinous crime
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crimes
such
as homicide, vandalism so on and so forth should not be shown any mercy and should be punished seriously. It is equally important to consider the seriousness of the illegal activity committed by the offender and also
punishing hard-core criminals
with death
sentence
would Fix the agreement mistake
sentences
also
create awareness among the citizens making them think twice before indulging in any serious offence knowingly or unknowingly. To cite an example, terrorists who are anti-social elements spreading terror in a country or world-wide
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worldwide
is
hanged Correct subject-verb agreement
are
till
Change preposition
to
death
, will
not only be an eye-opener to the other Correct pronoun usage
which will
people
who want to indulge in serious and heinous crimes. Therefore
, capital punishment is necessary for the people
based on the crime
committed . People
who are petty thieves to survive must be remanded in prisons and be given an opportunity to lead an honest life
in the
society.
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apply
Secondly
, capital punishment is the ultimate denial of human rights when implemented.Not all human beings are born criminals
. Situations and circumstances make them an anti-social element. Some people
to sustain themselves in the present competitive world, indulge in petty crimes such
as shoplifting and robbing. In addition
, unemployment in all walks of life
also
plays a spoilsport and tempting
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tempts
people
to take
wrong decisions. To demonstrate; Correct your spelling
make
people
living below the poverty line are promised greener pastures in the urban areas and are victimised to thieving to sustain themselves with basic necessities such
as food and shelter. In continuation, such
small convicts can be remanded and be provided with employment opportunities reducing the crime
rate. Convicting a person
with capital punishment or imprisonment
should be imposed looking into various parameters such
as the type of crime
committed and the frequency of the illegal activity committed.
Last
but not the
least, one should not judge a book by its cover. Keeping in mind the age of the criminal and the type of Correct article usage
apply
crime
committed , the judicial custody should determine whether to sentence
the person
with death
warrant or Correct article usage
a death
life
imprisonment
to make the offender understand the effect of a crime
on the victim.
To put it in a nutshell, as the saying goes a coin has both the
sides, Correct article usage
apply
likewise
sentencing a person
with death
warrant or Correct article usage
a death
life
imprisonment
depends on the crime
committed.Submitted by s_syedy on
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