The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage

of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years

2002 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and

make comparisons where relevant.
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Two bar graphs compare figures of the people who have computers spanning from 2002 to 2010 and the owners' educational levels in the year
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2002 and 2010, both measured in percentage.
Overall
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, the proportion of society with said devices
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gradually uplifting
as well as
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the
ownership
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percentage in all academic stages, with the highest position held by postgraduate qualifiers
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no high school diploma was the least.
Firstly
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, computer
ownership
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started below 60 in 2002 before moderately increasing until it reached roughly 70 by the end of the reporting period. The statistics moved to 60 in 2004, slightly beyond that number in 2006, and rose more significantly in the next two years.
On the other hand
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, all stages of education faced
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in 2010 compared to eight years earlier. Postgraduate qualification
ownership
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increased
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least 15 from 80 to approximately 95.
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, no high school diploma accounted for the lowest amount of
ownership
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among all categories, starting at below 20 in 2002.
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, its figure nearly tripled that number in less than a decade. Other categories ranked from the highest to the least in both years were bachelor's degree, uncompleted college, and high school graduates.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words ownership with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • consistent increase
  • growing reliance on technology
  • clear correlation
  • digital divide
  • notable growth
  • most pronounced disparity
  • gap reduced considerably
  • percentage growth
  • higher educational levels
  • educational groups
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