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The two maps below show the changes that have taken place in the town of Westley since 1815. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show the changes that have taken place in the town of Westley since 1815. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two maps show how the
town
Use synonyms
 of Westley has changed since 1815.
Overall
Linking Words
 we can see that the
town
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 has become more urban and developed than in the past. The
town
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 has
been
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become much less green than in the past and is now more modern.
For
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example
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 now there are no fields and
instead
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 a train line has been built with a train station and cinema. The wood in the centre of the
town
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 has been
cutted
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cut
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 down and has been replaced by a housing estate. There have been
making
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other changes
with
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to
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accomodation
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accommodation
 in the
town
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. All of the houses that
were
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surrounded the market square and
town
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 hall have
also
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 been knocked out and turned into
a
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residential and business
area
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areas
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 with a
further
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 residential, business and shopping area at the new end of the road. Other buildings in Westley are all different. The church has been demolished and there is now a shopping centre in its place. There is a sports centre and museum on the site of the coach inn and Lord
Westleys
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Westley
 House have been turned
to
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into
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 a pub and hotel.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • residential area
  • amenities
  • thoroughfare
  • connectivity
  • industrial development
  • factory
  • public amenities
  • recreational facilities
  • educational facilities
  • residential expansion
  • apartment blocks
  • commercial activity
  • shopping centers
  • restaurants
  • single-family homes
  • development
  • open field
  • noticeable change
  • replacing
  • establishment
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