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The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000

The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000
The pie charts compare the quantities of
electricity
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 fueled by different types of resources between Australia and France in the years 1980 and 2000. It is obvious that the
electricity
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 production of the two nations witnessed significant growth over the period shown, in which coal played an increasing role in Australia,
whereas
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 nuclear power accounted for the majority of producing
electricity
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 in France two decades later. In 1980, half of
electricity
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 was generated by coal, which rose to more than three quarters after 20 years, at 130
units
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. The trend was the same for hydropower, and the figure approximately doubled, increasing to 36
units
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.
By contrast
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, there was a sharp decline in generating
electricity
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 by oil and natural gas, which became almost negligible, and there was no data recorded for nuclear power. The amount of
electricity
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 powered by nuclear grew significantly with the figure rising from 15 to 126
units
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 over the 20-year period in the European country, which outnumbered twofold of the rest of the sources combined. The
units
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 of
electricity
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 produced by coal (25
units
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 in 1980) and oil (20
units
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 in 1980) nearly remained unchanged, at 25
units
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 respectively in 2000,
whereas
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 the proportions in the
overall
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 production were losing in popularity.
However
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, the quantities of
electricity
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 supplied by natural gas and hydropower were only 2
units
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 respectively, in 2000 showing a marked decrease of 23 and 3
units
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 compared with the previous year’s figures.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Electricity production
  • Fuel source
  • Renewable sources
  • Non-renewable sources
  • Significant change
  • Evolved
  • Dominant source
  • Introduction of new sources
  • Reliance
  • Electricity production mix
  • Environmental implications
  • Future trend
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