The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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illustrate
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average
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the average
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monthly change compared with
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month in
cost
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the cost
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of copper, nickel and zinc in 2014.
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,
the
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both three roles had significantly decreased from
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June
to June,
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keep
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stable or little increased to December. Looking more closely
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this
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figure, we can see that the most
dramaticantly
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dramatically
changed metal is Nickel, the highest point is in
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month
in
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this
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year,
apporx
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approximately
six
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more
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then
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last
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December. Wherera
almostly
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almost
down monthly in the following years, except there has slightly higher in June and
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October
only. In terms of other
mentals
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metals
, Copper is the most stable figure in
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three counts, all
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was
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not higher than plus 2% to
negetive
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negative
0.5% between
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the beginning
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and
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.
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, there are
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notable
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increased
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of
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Zinc in
whole
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year, the
most large
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increased
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was in
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February
.
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, there
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only decreased from June to
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October
,
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especially
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decreased
one
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percent
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per cent
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • volatile
  • stability
  • peak
  • trough
  • increment
  • decrement
  • steady
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • increase
  • decrease
  • month-on-month
  • average monthly change
  • commodity
  • benchmark
  • trend
  • precipitous
  • plateau
  • significant
  • marginal
  • surge
  • dip
  • plummet
  • soar
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