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The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990. 2000 and 2010. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990. 2000 and 2010. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The chart given above represents the
milk
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 produced in a
year
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 in four nations in the years, 1990, 2000 and 2010.
Overall
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,
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Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 was the biggest
milk
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 producer in all these three years, followed by
Australia
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.
Tanzania
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 and Guatemala were the only countries whose
milk
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production
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 constantly increased from 1990 to 2010.
To begin
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 with, In 1990, 11,262
thousand
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 of
litres
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milk
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 was produced in
Netherland
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Netherlands
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,
whereas
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,
Milk
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 produced in
Australia
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 was just 16
thousand
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litres
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 less than
milk
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 produced in
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Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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.
However
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,
Milk
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production
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 in both
the
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apply
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countries witnessed a decline
from
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between
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 the
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year
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years
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 1990 and 2000, 107
thousand
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litres
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 in
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Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 and 141
thousand
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litres
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 in
Australia
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. Later, in 2010
Milk
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production
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 in
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the Netherland
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Netherland
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Netherlands
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 increased as compared to its
production
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 in 1990 and 2010. In the
year
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 2010,
Milk
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production
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 in
Australia
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 decreased by approximately 20,00,000
litres
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 as compared to its
production
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 earlier in 1990 and 2010.
On the other hand
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,
Milk
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production
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 in
Tanzania
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 was just 87000
litres
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 in 1990 and it increased to 1,42,000 in the
year
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 2000,
furthermore
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, in 2010
milk
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 produced in
Tanzania
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 was 155000.
Also
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, the
milk
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 produced in Guatemala in 1990 was merely 26000
litres
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 , but later in
2000
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2000,
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 it increased to 1,42,000 and
then
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 to 1,55,000 in the
year
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 2010.
To sum up
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,
Milk
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production
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 in
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Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 was almost equal in 1990,2000 and 2010.
Tanzania
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's
milk
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production
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 almost doubled
up
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apply
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in the
year
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 2010 as compared to its
milk
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production
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 in the
year
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 1990.
Milk
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production
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 in Guatemala almost tripled
up
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from 26000
litres
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 of
milk
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 in 1990 to 84000
litres
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 of
milk
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 in 2010.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words milk, year, netherlands, australia, tanzania, production, thousand, litres with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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