The table below presents the number of children ever born to women aged 40-44 years in Australia for each year the information was collected since 1981.

The table below presents the number of children ever born to women aged 40-44 years in Australia for each year the information was collected since 1981.
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The table chart shows the percentage of babies who were born in 1981, 1986,1996 and 2006 and mothers were aged between 40 and 44 years in Australia.
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, it can be seen that the percentage of females who had no kids, one child and two
children
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sharply increased between 1981 and 2006.
In contrast
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, the percentage of women who had three kids and four or more declined in the years 1986, 1996 and 2006.
To begin
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with, in 2006, the highest proportion was women who had two
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about 38.2 per
cent
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. Followed by three
children
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, no babies and one child about 21.5 per
cent
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, none and one child respectively. The lowest was four or more accounting for 11 per
cent
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. In 1981, two kids were higher than others at 29 per
cent
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,and four or more and three
children
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were
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at 27.6
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per
cent
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and 27.4 per
cent
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. But the lowest was 7.6 per
cent
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.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words children, cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fertility rate
  • demographic shift
  • age cohort
  • workforce implications
  • government policy
  • birth rate fluctuations
  • education level
  • career advancement
  • reproductive health
  • family planning
  • socio-economic factors
  • population pyramid
  • life expectancy
  • childbearing age
  • maternity leave
  • contraceptive methods
  • population growth rate
  • average family size
  • maternal health
  • census data
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