Bullying is a big problem in many schools. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

It has been found that bullying is a big problem in many schools.
That is
bothering parents, kids and their teachers.
Thus
let’s discuss possible causes and suggest solutions to
this
issue.
To begin
with, children tend to form groups at
school
with other students who usually have common interests.
As a result
, the individuals who have different interests, clothes and many other aspects that make them differ from other pupils, can be bullied
for
this
reason.
For example
, bright clothes, an old phone, glasses or any dissimilarity from the major part of a group could cause conflicts among children and,
therefore
, bullying the minor part of the form.
Besides
, one more reason for
this
phenomena
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can be
lack
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of control and education from both teachers in a classroom and parents at home. As an illustration, those who experience aggression and violence at home, later come to
school
and blow off steam on their schoolmates, which means bullying. On the first face, it seems that only the victim needs help in
this
situation, but in fact, the aggressor
also
requires the support of a specialist. The matter is that the bully can
also
be a victim out of
school
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provokes him to wreak his anger on someone weaker in the class. So, I am convinced that to solve the problem at the root, both sides need qualified help
by
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a specialist.
On the other hand
, the
school
can
initially
prevent bullying through some measures to regulate students’ discipline to make them control their emotions.
To sum up
, both parents and
school
staff are responsible for dealing with bullying.
Exclusively
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deep investigation of each contradiction between youngsters can settle the situation and avoid
further
confrontation. Generally, kids are not capable of resolving
such
problems themselves.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Bullying
  • Harassment
  • Intimidation
  • Diversity
  • Adolescent
  • Mimic
  • Aggressive behavior
  • Cyberbullying
  • Peer pressure
  • Social acceptance
  • Awareness
  • Conflict resolution
  • Peer mediation
  • Consequences
  • Respect
  • Kindness
  • Open communication
  • Vulnerable
  • Buddy system
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