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The following pie charts show the main modes of transportation people used to to travel to university for work or study in 2004 and 2009.

The following pie charts show the main modes of transportation people used to to travel to university for work or study in 2004 and 2009.
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The pie charts illustrate the kinds of transportation people used
such
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 as cars,
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bus
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buses
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, walking ,
train
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trains
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, and
bicycle
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bicycles
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 from 2004 to 2009.
Overall
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,
while
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 in 2004 the
most
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apply
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methods they used was represented by cars and
bus
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 , in 2009
bus
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become
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became
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 the most popular type of transportation.
Firstly
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,
meanwhile
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meanwhile,
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 in
2004
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2004,
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 the
bus
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 represented only 33% of
methods
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the methods
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, in 2009 it increased to 46% , becoming the main way to move .
Secondly
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, walking and
train
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training
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 had a small growth over the given period , from 3% and 4% to 4% and 6% ,
respectivily
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respectively
.
Furthermore
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, the biggest decline has
occured
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occurred
 in cars , starting from 51% of
methods
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the methods
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 the
pople
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people
 used , and ending at 28% .
Nevertheless
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, the bicycle shows
slight
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a slight
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 increased
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of aroud
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aroud
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around
 7% during the given period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words bus with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • means of transport
  • commuting patterns
  • sustainable travel
  • urban congestion
  • public transportation
  • private vehicles
  • carpooling
  • urban infrastructure
  • environmental impact
  • modal shift
  • cyclists
  • pedestrians
  • traffic volume
  • ride-sharing
  • policy initiatives
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