The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals, of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
The pie charts show the average consumption of
sodium
, saturated fat and added sugar
when people
eat meals
in
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breakfast
, lunch, dinner or a
snack in the USA. These ingredients may be Correct article usage
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harmfull
to health when Correct your spelling
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meals
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Also
, people
mostly consume sodium
and saturated fat during their dinner but they mostly take the sugar
from snacks
.
When people
make their dinner they also
take 43% sodium
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are higher
meals
except added sugar
. Lunch is the second meal that people
intake most of these minerals, fats and sugar
with 29%, 26% and 19% respectively.
Breakfasts and snacks
are more healthy meals
when we checked the numbers. People
only take 14% sodium
from both meals
and this
is the lowest amount for this
mineral. Snacks
contain more saturated fat than breakfast
with 21% and 16%, respectively. However
, snacks
are not healthy options when we compare them with sugar
content because nearly half of added sugar
comes from it but breakfast
still
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added
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of added
sugar
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