The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals, of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

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The pie charts show the average consumption of

sodium

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, saturated fat and added

sugar

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when

people

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eat

meals

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for

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their

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apply

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breakfast

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, lunch, dinner or

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apply

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snack in the USA. These ingredients may be

harmfull

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harmful

to health when

consume

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consumed

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them

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apply

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too much.

Overall

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breakfast

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is one of the healthy

meal

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meals

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when compared with the others because it doesn’t contain too much

from

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show examples

these ingredients.

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people

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mostly consume

sodium

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and saturated fat during their dinner but they mostly take the

sugar

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from

snacks

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. When

people

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make their dinner they

also

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take 43%

sodium

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, 37% saturated fat and 23% added

sugar

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. Those numbers

higher

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are higher

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than other

meals

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except added

sugar

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. Lunch is the second meal that

people

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intake most of these minerals, fats and

sugar

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with 29%, 26% and 19% respectively. Breakfasts and

snacks

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are more healthy

meals

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when we checked the numbers.

People

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only take 14%

sodium

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from both

meals

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and

this

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is the lowest amount for

this

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mineral.

Snacks

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contain more saturated fat than

breakfast

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with 21% and 16%, respectively.

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snacks

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are not healthy options when we compare them with

sugar

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content because nearly half of added

sugar

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comes from it but

breakfast

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still

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is still

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good

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a good

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option with 16% which is the lowest amount

added

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of added

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sugar

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that comes from

meals

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium, sugar, people, meals, breakfast, snacks with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
6
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

210 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Nutrients
Unhealthy
Daily intake
Percentage
Carbohydrates
Fats
Proteins
Meals
Balanced diet
Consumption
Excess
Health implications
Obesity
Diabetes
Heart disease
Convenience foods
Fast foods
Socioeconomic factors
Lifestyle choices
Healthy eating habits
Dietary recommendations

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The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals, of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

What do you think are the causes of this? What can be done to draw people's attention to art? The government's investment in arts, music and theatre is a waste of money. Governments should invest these funds in public services instead.

Governemts should spend more on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

To what extent has the internet made life more convenient? Give reasons for your answer and give any relavent examples from your own knowledge or experienc.

In some countries, there has been an increase in the number of parents choosing to self-educate their children at home rather then sending them to school. Do the advantages of home education outweigh the disadvantages?