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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise th einformation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise th einformation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two maps depict the developments of
road
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 access which took place in the urban hospital between 2007 and 2010.
Overall
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, a
comparsion
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comparison
 of the two maps reveals a complete transformation from an underdeveloped hospital to a
develop
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developed
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 hospital. In the year 2007, the hospital had a simple
infrastucture
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infrastructure
 with lots of bus-stop but during the next 3 years, the hospital saw a number of significant changes. The most noticeable is that all of the
bus-stop
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bus stops
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 near the hospital main
road
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being
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are being
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 demolished . The car parking for public and staff have
devided
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divided
 into a new specific location.
Moreover
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, a new
infrastucture
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infrastructure
 has
developed
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been developed
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 with
bus
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the bus
a bus
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 station and
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road
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a road
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 roundabout
has
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apply
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created.
In contrast
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, only place of the city hospital remained. The
bus-stop
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bus stop
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 was cleared and converted into
bus
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the bus
a bus
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 station .
In addition
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,
In
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apply
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the intersection of the city
road
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 was replaced by a circular
road
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 structure.
Furthermore
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,
In
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apply
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the east part of the hospital
transform
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has transformed
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 into a general people vehicle parking. A new bus station was
also
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 constructed and it connects the city
road
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 roundabout with the hospital
road
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 roundabout.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • carriageway
  • roundabout
  • dual
  • interchange
  • pedestrian
  • footpath
  • commuter
  • facilities
  • accessibility
  • congestion
  • transit
  • urban planning
  • modernization
  • demolished
  • erected
  • adjacent
  • connectivity
  • redirected traffic
  • enhanced
  • displaced
  • underpass
  • bypass
  • renovate
  • capacity
  • upgrade
  • satellite view
  • aerial perspective
  • layout
  • zone
  • implemented changes
  • decongest
  • flow of traffic
  • vehicular movement
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