The charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarize the information by selecting reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The vertical chart makes a comparison of
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time
working Correct article usage
the time
adults
expenditure on 4 activities in 3 nations. Use synonyms
Overall
, the proportion of Linking Words
time
allocated to flats by London’s citizens seems to outweigh the rest, Use synonyms
while
terraced Linking Words
houses
were the least occupied in Use synonyms
time
working Use synonyms
adults
.
The proportion of Use synonyms
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working Use synonyms
adults
in London spent on Flats constituted approximately 60%, which was 2 times as much as in Oxford (30%), followed by the figure for Cambridge at 20%. Use synonyms
In contrast
, detached Linking Words
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houses
activity occupied over 30% of Cambridge's citizen Change the noun form
house
time
. Approximately a quarter of Use synonyms
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time
that was spent on detached Add an article
the time
houses
by Use synonyms
adults
living in Oxford nation was recognized, compared to only 9% Use synonyms
than
that in London.
An estimated 26% of Change preposition
apply
time
expenditure on semi-detached by the Use synonyms
adults
in Oxford and Cambridge was similar, with London’s citizens allocating 17% of their Use synonyms
time
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on
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to
this
activity.
Meanwhile, only a tiny fraction of Linking Words
time
spent on terraced Use synonyms
houses
by Use synonyms
adults
in both three countries was around 15%.Use synonyms
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