The charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarize the information by selecting reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The vertical chart makes a comparison of
time
working Correct article usage
the time
adults
expenditure on 4 activities in 3 nations. Overall
, the proportion of time
allocated to flats by London’s citizens seems to outweigh the rest, while
terraced houses
were the least occupied in time
working adults
.
The proportion of time
working adults
in London spent on Flats constituted approximately 60%, which was 2 times as much as in Oxford (30%), followed by the figure for Cambridge at 20%. In contrast
, detached houses
activity occupied over 30% of Cambridge's citizen Change the noun form
house
time
. Approximately a quarter of time
that was spent on detached Add an article
the time
houses
by adults
living in Oxford nation was recognized, compared to only 9% than
that in London.
An estimated 26% of Change preposition
apply
time
expenditure on semi-detached by the adults
in Oxford and Cambridge was similar, with London’s citizens allocating 17% of their time
on
Change preposition
to
this
activity.
Meanwhile, only a tiny fraction of time
spent on terraced houses
by adults
in both three countries was around 15%.Submitted by phongnguyenthanh630 on
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