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The chart below shows the different level of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999.

The chart below shows the different level of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999.
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The given bar horizontal chart illustrates the
requirements
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 after graduating from school in Australia in 1999. The measured use count of genders in Australia. In general, the highest
qualifications
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 for graduated students had the majority of
requirements
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 for male students.
In contrast
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, the lowest
qualifications
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 were skilled vocational diplomas for women. Regarding the three highest
qualifications
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 for males, the highest
value
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 was a skilled vocational
diploma
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, where the
value
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 was count of 90. Followed by Postgraduate
Diploma
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requirements
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 had 70 per cent.
Furthermore
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, the third highest
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 was a count of 60 by master's degree. In terms of
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women's
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women
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women,
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qualifications
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 had lower than men's.
Nevertheless
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, the proportion of the
qualifications
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 for women had the highest
value
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 in the Undergraduate
Diploma
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, where the number in 70 per cent.
Moreover
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, It was clear that the lowest
value
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 had a skilled vocational
diploma
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, which had
acount
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a count
account
 of 10.
Therefore
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, the
qualifications
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 for the
male
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males
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 had more
requirements
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 than the females in Australia by 1999.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words requirements, qualifications, value, diploma with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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