The chart below shows the different level of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999.
The given bar horizontal chart illustrates the
requirements
after graduating from school in Australia in 1999. The measured use count of genders in Australia.
In general, the highest qualifications
for graduated students had the majority of requirements
for male students. In contrast
, the lowest qualifications
were skilled vocational diplomas for women.
Regarding the three highest qualifications
for males, the highest value
was a skilled vocational diploma
, where the value
was count of 90. Followed by Postgraduate Diploma
requirements
had 70 per cent. Furthermore
, the third highest value
was a count of 60 by master's degree.
In terms of the
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qualifications
had lower than men's. Nevertheless
, the proportion of the qualifications
for women had the highest value
in the Undergraduate Diploma
, where the number in 70 per cent. Moreover
, It was clear that the lowest value
had a skilled vocational diploma
, which had acount
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Therefore
, the qualifications
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males
requirements
than the females in Australia by 1999.Submitted by ru.kabiru.biru on
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