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The chart below shows the transport which young people preferred to use in different countries.

The chart below shows the transport which young people preferred to use in different countries.
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Contained in the illustration is information pertaining to the young
generation
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 preference in terms of the type of vehicles from four
distinguish
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 nations. From an observational perspective, teenagers enjoy using
automobile
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the automobile
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 in Great Britain,
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the USA
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USA
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the USA
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 and France
whereas
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bikes
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bike
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bikes
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was
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 the most favourable
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one
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 in Germany.
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, the rate of motorcycle usage was the lowest in these countries with the exception of the
USA
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. Looking at the graph in
further
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three-quater
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three-quarters
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 of the French youngsters
choosed
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chose
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car
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a car
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 and only 15% prefer
motorbike
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a motorbike
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.
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, there is nearly 30% of British
adolescence
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adolescents
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 nominated
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bike
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bikes
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 and the proportion of teens
prefering
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preferring
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car
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cars
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 almost doubled that of
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bike
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bikes
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.
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,
the
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Great Britain and France have
the
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an
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 equal percentage of motorcycle preference, both at 10%. Moving onto the remaining nations,
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car
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cars
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 dominated the
vote's
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vote
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 rate in the
USA
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 with 60% which was two
time
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 greater than that of
motorbike
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motorbikes
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.
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, the
USA
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 witnessed 10% of young citizens prefer
bicycle
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bicycles
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.
In contrast
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,
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bike
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the bike
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 was the main choice in Germany with
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an estimatedly
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estimatedly
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estimated
 45% and
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car
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the car
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 was just 5% lower.
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, more than 10% of young residents picked
motorbike
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motorbikes
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.
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