The graph below shows the population change between 1940 and 2000 in three different counties in the US state of Oregon.
The provided graph illustrates the
population
fluctuations from 1940 to 2000 in various counties in the U.S. state of Oregon.
In given
period of time from 1940 to 2000 Add an article
a given
population
of each county Correct article usage
the population
gain
gradually, but 1970 become Wrong verb form
gained
shift
point for all given regions because of Correct article usage
a shift
sharp
climb.
In 60 years district of Columbia did not rise in position, but had the largest increase in Add an article
the sharp
a sharp
population
. At the initial point area of Columbia has
20 Wrong verb form
had
thousand
people
population
and at the beginning of XXI
Correct article usage
the XXI
century
it had more Add a comma
century,
that
80 Correct word choice
than
thousand
people
.
Washington county
continued to stay on the top, Capitalize word
County
nevertheless
population
of that place had grown up
more than 3 times from 75 Change preposition
apply
thousand
to 245.000 people
. The lowest raise
in Correct your spelling
rise
population
had region
of Yamhill Add an article
the region
a region
that
in 60 years had less than 55 Correct pronoun usage
apply
thousand
people
or 300
% gain.Correct article usage
a 300
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