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The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentages of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time.

The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentages of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time.
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represents
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 the number of
books
 that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart illustrates the percentage of
books
, by
type
, that were borrowed over
this
 time.
Overall
, during in four-month period. Sutton Wood village
rised
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raised
 the borrowed from libraries on
books
, with all 3 villages borrowed of
books
 much less on them. Fiction
type
 of book climbed on almost half.
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Then
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 other four types of
book
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books
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borrowed
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. Getting back to the details, In September Sutton Wood borrowed of
books
librarie
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libraries
library
,
while
 West Eaton and Church Mount borrowed about as less each other.
However
, by July, the line in borrowed had
considerbale
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considerably
considerable
 reduced and by August, the gap borrowed between these two villages. As can be seen from the graph, the period between June and September saw a graph somewhat waves. The most borrowed only just under half of Fiction
type
,
whereas
 Self-Help
type
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this
 total a small portion borrowed.
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 two types a small minority
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 for Science and History types. Turning to
chart
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,
biograpy
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biography
books
 were the most preferred at 43
percent
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 and nearly one-fifth chose biography.
While
 science and history
books
 were both borrowed by 14% of the readers, 10% of them chose self-help
books
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 88%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, type with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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