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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The figure illustrates the Industrial zone of Norbiton
as well as
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 its developing scheme for the future.
Overall
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,
this
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 area is planned to be transformed from its current situation to a residential area. As it is clear from the map, plans are to demolish all of the factories in each and every corner to make room for houses and facilities. To the east of the map,
at the end
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 of a street headed to the East from the
square
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, a new school is going to take place, and along
this
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 street, houses will be located.
At
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 the middle of the street, to the north,
at
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on
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south
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the south
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 bank of the river, a playground will be constructed. To the centre of the map, around the
square
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, a Medical centre
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in
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at
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in
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 the
South-East
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southeast
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 and Shops
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in
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at
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in
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the South-West
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South-West
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the South-West
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 of the
square
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are
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is
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 planned to be built.
While
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 facing the North of the
square
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 a new road will pass the river
trough
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through
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 a new
a
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apply
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bridge, which
make
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 dwellers able to pass the river and make it to the new housing area, located adjacent to the farmland.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words square with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned future development
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • railway line
  • shopping center
  • residential buildings
  • college
  • mixed-use zone
  • commercial
  • residential
  • educational
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian walkways
  • housing
  • community
  • retail services
  • revitalize
  • quality of life
  • vibrant
  • sustainable
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