The graph below shows fast food consumption among men and women in 2015

The graph below shows fast food consumption among men and women in 2015
The bar chart displays information about
percentage
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the percentage
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of
men
and
women
consuming fast food in 2015.
Overall
both
men
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and
woman
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women
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consumption
rate
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rates
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getting lower time by time as they
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old
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. People
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around 18-34
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the highest
percentage
on
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of
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daily
calories
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consumption,
men
reached 17% followed by
women
with 16%. When
men
and
women
getting
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are
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adult
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adults
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aged 35-49 the
percentage
for
both
dropped
into
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around 9-10%. Age group 50-64 shows
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a slightly
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slightly decreased
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of
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the daily calories
percentage
with roughly 8-9%,
this
implied for
both
men
and
women
. A dramatic drop happened when people getting old
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age
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the age
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group 65+, the percentages
down
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were down
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into
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around 3-5% as
this
became the lowest
percentage
of daily
calories
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calorie
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consumption for
both
gender
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genders
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, men, women, both with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • fast food consumption
  • men
  • women
  • 2015
  • compare
  • contrast
  • differences
  • reasons
  • solutions
  • excessive
  • address
  • issue
  • recap
  • final thought
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