You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The pie graphs show the nutritional consistency of two dinners. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The pie graphs show the nutritional consistency of two dinners. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data.

You should write at least 150 words.
The two pie charts illustrate the nutritional consistency ratio of
medium baked
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medium-baked
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potatos
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potatoes
potato
and
macaroni
.
Overall
,
It is clear that
,
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medium
baked
potatos
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potatoes
potato
is more
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are
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healthier than
macaroni
because of the
less
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lower
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amount of carbohydrates and saturated fat.
To begin
with, the carbohydrate consistency of
medium
baked
potato
is about 35 per cent
whereas
the
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macaroni
contains just more than half of the total nutrients(52%).
Furthermore
,
medium
baked
potato
has a better percentage of protein,a quarter of the total
while
macaroni
has 11%.
Moreover
,40% encountered glucose,saturated fat and other
nutients
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nutrients
in yam.Respectively 15%, 10% and 15%.
However
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the glucose consistency of
macaroni
is lower than
potatos
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potatoes
, about 11% and the other nutrients contain 5% which is one-third of the baked
potato
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potato's
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other nutrient amount
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another nutrient amount
other nutrient amounts
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.
However
, the nutritional containment of
macaroni
is unbalanced
due to
the high proportion of saturated fat.Which is about 21%
whereas
the
medium
baked
potato
has less than
a
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half of it.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, whereas".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words medium, macaroni, potato with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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