Some governments provide financial assistance for retired, unemployed and disabled citizens. In other countries, families provide support for these people. Discuss both systems and give your opinion about which one you think is better.

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increases.

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resourses

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resources

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provided by

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or governments, should be spent on taking care of these people.

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eastern

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families

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is considered

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a family

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for tackling

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the issue. The following essay will

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both systems as well as my personal opinion. In some countries, mostly eastern ones, the

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of looking after disabled and old

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families

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duty;

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might not be a good idea.

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care of

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may hurt the other members of a family.

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, if someone has an unemployed brother or sister he/she might be forced to pay him/her bills and by doing

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, the extra unnecessary pressure is on one member and

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not simply fair. As

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is evident in most eastern

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, usually one of

children

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take

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the responsibility

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others and most of

family

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members do almost nothing to help that person in need, whether it is

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elderly, unemployed brother or sister or one with

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kind of disability. And

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in

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not simply fair for him/her.

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, some other countries, mostly

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of solving

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,

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and

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to develop a

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for solving it. In

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system

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there have been centres and

a

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unique systems for preventing

peoples

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people

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from

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burden. Take Germany

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, they have a

system

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for solving elderly and disabled

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care

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problem

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, a

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for unemployed

peoples

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. And

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way

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of solving the

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as a society

,

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has

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their young ones to have a lot more comfortable life. In conclusion, the systematic

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of and, western has more merits to answer

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problem

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as a society not to put it on the shoulders of some individuals.