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The table below presents the number of children ever born to women aged 40-44 years in Australia for each year the information was collected since 1981.

The table below presents the number of children ever born to women aged 40-44 years in Australia for each year the information was collected since 1981.
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The table informs about
variety
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the variety
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the
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 number of
children
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 from
women
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 aged between 40 and 44. There are
two
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 parameters which are
year
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a year
the year
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 and the number of
children
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. In 1981
women
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 with
two
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children
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was
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were
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dominated
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while
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women
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 with three
and
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or
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 more
children
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was
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considering
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 the same. Meanwhile, five years later
women
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 who gave birth to
two
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children
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 increased and by 1996 and a decade later,
women
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 with
two
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children
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 still dominated. By 2006,
women
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preffered
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preferred
 not to have more than four
children
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 but having
two
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children
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 was
being
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the most popular condition
by
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at
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 the time.
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, in 1996 there was
lack
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a lack
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 of
women
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 that was having one
child
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 but the percentage of childless
women
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 was bigger at that time.
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, a decade before 1996, the percentage of
women
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 with no
child
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, one
child
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,
two
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childrenc
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children
 three
children
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 and four or more
children
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 was 9.7%, 8.7%, 35.6%, 27%,
18,9
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and 18,9
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% respectively.
One-fourths
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 century before 2006, only 8,5%
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women
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of women
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was having
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had
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 no
child
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, and the number of
women
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 with one
child
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even
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was even
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 smaller.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words children, women, two, child with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fertility rate
  • demographic shift
  • age cohort
  • workforce implications
  • government policy
  • birth rate fluctuations
  • education level
  • career advancement
  • reproductive health
  • family planning
  • socio-economic factors
  • population pyramid
  • life expectancy
  • childbearing age
  • maternity leave
  • contraceptive methods
  • population growth rate
  • average family size
  • maternal health
  • census data
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