The table below presents the number of children ever born to women aged 40-44 years in Australia for each year the information was collected since 1981.

The table below presents the number of children ever born to women aged 40-44 years in Australia for each year the information was collected since 1981.
The table informs about
variety
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the variety
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the
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of the
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number of
children
from
women
aged between 40 and 44. There are
two
parameters which are
year
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a year
the year
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and the number of
children
. In 1981
women
with
two
children
was
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were
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dominated
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dominant
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while
women
with three
and
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or
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more
children
was
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were
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considering
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considered
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the same. Meanwhile, five years later
women
who gave birth to
two
children
increased and by 1996 and a decade later,
women
with
two
children
still dominated. By 2006,
women
preffered
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preferred
not to have more than four
children
but having
two
children
was
being
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apply
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the most popular condition
by
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at
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the time.
In contrast
, in 1996 there was
lack
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a lack
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of
women
that was having one
child
but the percentage of childless
women
was bigger at that time.
Moreover
, a decade before 1996, the percentage of
women
with no
child
, one
child
,
two
childrenc
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children
three
children
and four or more
children
was 9.7%, 8.7%, 35.6%, 27%,
18,9
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and 18,9
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% respectively.
One-fourths
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century before 2006, only 8,5%
women
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of women
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was having
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had
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no
child
, and the number of
women
with one
child
even
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was even
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smaller.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words children, women, two, child with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fertility rate
  • demographic shift
  • age cohort
  • workforce implications
  • government policy
  • birth rate fluctuations
  • education level
  • career advancement
  • reproductive health
  • family planning
  • socio-economic factors
  • population pyramid
  • life expectancy
  • childbearing age
  • maternity leave
  • contraceptive methods
  • population growth rate
  • average family size
  • maternal health
  • census data
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