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You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course. Write a letter to the course director at the cookery school. In your letter, describe what you enjoyed about the course say how much cooking you've done since the course suggest another cookery course you'd like the school to offer Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Sir, I hope you are in sound health and doing well. I am writing
this
 letter to inform you about my feedback on the short cookery
course
 that I
have
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completed from your esteemed school
last
 month.
To begin
 with, I have enjoyed a lot
this
three-months
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 long short
course
 on contemporary cookery items. The
overall
 facilities
was
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 really excellent
such
 as spacious and air-conditioned
class room
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,
friendly
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 atmosphere, and modern
equipments
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equipment
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are
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helped all the participants very much to gain
the
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knowledge on how to
cooke
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cook
 delicious
food
. You will be glad to hear that after completing
this
 short
course
, I have started cooking in my house to experience how to cook continental,
chinese
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, and
italian
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food
. Twice
in
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a week, I spend my days
to prepare
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 different types of
food
, especially
the
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chicken
burger
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burgers
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 and pizza which are very much
favourite
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to
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 my family members.
Furthermore
, I would appreciate it if you start another short
course
 in your school on how to cook
mexican
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Mexican
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food
. Some of my friends
are
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 asked me about
this
course
 as they are very much interested
to learn
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in learning
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 how to cook
mexican
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food
. I wish all the best for your cookery school. Yours faithfully, Faisal
Submitted by faisalmahamood on

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Greeting and Closing
Ensure the letter has a clear opening and closing, maintaining the appropriate formal tone throughout.
Single Idea per Paragraph
Group related information together and keep one idea to each paragraph to enhance readability.
Suitable Writing Tone
A more formal tone matching a letter to an authority should be consistently applied, avoiding informal language when addressing the course director.
Complete Response
Make sure to fully address all three bullet points of the task with sufficient detail, combined with your personal experiences or suggestions.
Logical Structure
The letter should flow logically from one point to the next, using appropriate transition words and phrases to improve coherence.
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