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The chart below shows the transport which young peopole preferred to use in different countries.

The chart below shows the transport which young peopole preferred to use in different countries.
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The given bar chart reveals the proportion of 3 different means of transport
prefered
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preferred
 by youngsters from 4 selected
nations
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.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
car
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the car
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 was more popular than the others, with the exception of Germany.
Additionally
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, the biggest
disaparities
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disparities
 among vehicles
was
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were
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 seen in France. Regarding
car
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the car
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 which was preferred most by the youth in 3
nations
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, it
recorded
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was recorded
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 that Great
Britian
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Britain
 and
USA
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the USA
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 shared exactly the same rate at 60%,
while
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 over 70%
French
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of French
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 youngsters opted to travel by car. Below
this
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 was Germans which showed roughly 40% preferred
this
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 kind of transport. Turning to the remaining data, 30%
young
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of young
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 Americans
was
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were
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 recorded to be in favour of using
motorcycle
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a motorcycle
the motorcycle
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 for travel, which was triple
than
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apply
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the figure in other
nations
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. Moving to
bicycle
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bicycles
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,
it
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apply
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ranged from 10% to over 40%
youngsters
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of youngsters
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 who wanted to travel by bicycle among these 4
nations
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words nations with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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