You have recently migrated to another country. Now write this letter to your friend to describe your present life. In your letter say.. When you have moved to this country Why you chose this country How things are now for you

#country #friend #life

Dear Sumon, I hope you are in sound health and doing well. I am writing

this

letter to inform you about

breifly

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briefly

describing my present life in Toronto,

Canada

. As you know, I have been preparing myself

in immigrating

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to immigrate

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Canada

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to Canada

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permanent

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a permanent

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residence with my family members.

For

this

reason, I was very busy

to complete

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completing

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my visa processing by a local renowned agency and I

could

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was

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not able to inform you about my plan to migrate

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apply

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abroad. By the grace of almighty Allah,

finally

I got

Canada

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a Canada

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visa on

7th

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the 7th

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of November 2023 with permanent residence in Toronto.

Furthermore

, we have already started to

get preparation

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with bags and baggage to move to

Canada

. The flight ticket has been booked and we will fly by Bangladesh Airlines at 10 pm, on

25th

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the 25th

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of November. As far as I am concerned,

Canada

is a very beautiful country to live in with family members.

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, there is a lot of employment opportunity where I can get a job with a view to enhance my professional career. Almost one month passed,

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and we

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have been staying in Toronto,

Canada

Overall

, we have been enjoying our days since the inception of landing in

Canada

. Yours lovingly, Faisal

Submitted by faisalmahamood on Mon Nov 20 2023

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Task Achievement

Ensure that the letter addresses all the points mentioned in the task. Provide more elaboration on 'Why you chose this country' and 'How things are now for you' with specific examples or experiences.

Task Achievement

Work on crafting a suitable writing tone that is consistent throughout the letter. The tone should be friendly and informal since you are writing to a friend.

Coherence and Cohesion

The letter would benefit from a more cohesive structure with clear logical progression from one paragraph to the next. Use linking words and phrases effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion

Include a more personalised salutation and complimentary close that are appropriate for a letter to a friend.

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6Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

204 words

4.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

opportunity
culture shock
adjustment
adventure
language barrier
bureaucracy
immigration process
exciting
challenging
networking
international community
integration
support system
job prospects
standard of living
multicultural
diverse
satisfying

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