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The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts compare changes
of
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electricity
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production
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 by fuel source in the shares of five different ways in
Australia
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 and
France
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 in 1980 and 200.
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diagrams
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the diagrams
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,
total
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the total
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production
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 of
units
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 rose in 2000 in comparison with 1980 in both countries. High rise can be noticed in nuclear
power
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 in
France
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,
while
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 in
Australia
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 the main method of
production
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electricity
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of electricity
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 was coal. Usage of coal was half of
total
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the total
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 100
units
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 that
produced
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were produced
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 in 1980,
whereas
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this
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 figure was
quarter
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a quarter
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 of
total
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the total
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 90
units
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 in
Australia
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.
Hydro
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Hydropower
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power
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 and natural gas
were
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accounted
20
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for 20
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units
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 for both in
Australia
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, but in
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France
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France,
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 the index of
hydro
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hydropower
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power
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 is considerably low with only just 5
units
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 and natural gas produced
quarter
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a quarter
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 of total
production
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. There was
also
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 nuclear
power
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 in
France
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, which made 15
units
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 of
electricity
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. Going through 2000, we can notice
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the use of
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 hydro
power
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 and natural gas in
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production
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the production
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 of
electricity
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extremely
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apply
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fell up to 2
units
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 in both countries . Using coal did not change through
years
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the years
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, using oil rose
up
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apply
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to 5
units
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 and stands at 25 from
total
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the total
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2000
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of 2000
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units
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 that have
produced
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been produced
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 in
France
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. But we can see a great rise in
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the use of
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 nuclear
power
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, which made 126
units
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.
Same
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The same
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 change happened in using coal in
Australia
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, which made 130
units
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 of
total
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a total
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2000
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of 2000
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units
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 of
electricity
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, production, australia, france, units, power with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • units of electricity production
  • fuel source
  • dominant source
  • reliance on coal
  • hydroelectric power
  • natural gas
  • significant reduction
  • primary source
  • drastically increased
  • transition
  • existing infrastructure
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