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The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts compare changes
of
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in
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electricity
production
 by fuel source in the shares of five different ways in
Australia
 and
France
 in 1980 and 200.
According to
diagrams
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the diagrams
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,
total
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the total
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production
 of
units
 rose in 2000 in comparison with 1980 in both countries. High rise can be noticed in nuclear
power
 in
France
,
while
 in
Australia
 the main method of
production
electricity
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of electricity
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 was coal. Usage of coal was half of
total
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the total
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 100
units
 that
produced
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were produced
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 in 1980,
whereas
this
 figure was
quarter
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a quarter
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 of
total
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the total
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 90
units
 in
Australia
.
Hydro
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Hydropower
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power
 and natural gas
were
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apply
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accounted
20
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for 20
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units
 for both in
Australia
, but in
France
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France,
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 the index of
hydro
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hydropower
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power
 is considerably low with only just 5
units
 and natural gas produced
quarter
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a quarter
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 of total
production
. There was
also
 nuclear
power
 in
France
, which made 15
units
 of
electricity
. Going through 2000, we can notice
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the use of
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 hydro
power
 and natural gas in
production
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the production
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 of
electricity
extremely
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apply
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fell up to 2
units
 in both countries . Using coal did not change through
years
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the years
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, using oil rose
up
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apply
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to 5
units
 and stands at 25 from
total
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the total
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2000
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of 2000
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units
 that have
produced
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been produced
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 in
France
. But we can see a great rise in
using
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the use of
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 nuclear
power
, which made 126
units
.
Same
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The same
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 change happened in using coal in
Australia
, which made 130
units
 of
total
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a total
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2000
Change preposition
of 2000
show examples
units
 of
electricity
.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, production, australia, france, units, power with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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