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The charts below show information about music preference of the teenagers and the middle-aged perspectively. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The charts below show information about music preference of the teenagers and the middle-aged perspectively. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
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The graphs above demonstrate the
music
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 preference of the
teenagers
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 and the middle-aged respectively. Both charts depict the distribution of the same categories of
music
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, including
rap
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music
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,
rock
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 and roll
music
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, classical
music
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,
country
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music
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, and alternative.
Overall
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,
rap
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music
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 is the most popular, and
country
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music
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 is the least among
teenagers
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while
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 the opposite is true among the middle-aged. For
teenagers
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, half reported a preference for
rap
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music
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, which became the top among all kinds of
music
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.
This
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 was followed by
rock
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 and roll
music
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, which accounted for 19%. A small percentage of
teenagers
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favored
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favoured
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 classical
music
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 and
country
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music
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, accounting for 2% and 19% respectively.
Besides
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, there were one-fourth of
teenagers
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 preferred other types of
music
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. For the middle-aged,
country
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music
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 was the most popular
music
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 type, chosen by 42% of respondents. The least picked one is
rap
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music
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, accounting for 6%. Classical
music
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 and
rock
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 and roll
music
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 were
favored
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favoured
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 by 28% and 15% respectively,
whereas
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 the remaining 9% chose
alternative
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an alternative
the alternative
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. In conclusion, the two pie charts above compare the
music
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 preferences of
teenagers
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 and the middle-aged. The preference for
rock
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music
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 is almost the same
while
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 the proportions of other types of
music
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 are different between
teenagers
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 and the middle-aged.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words music, teenagers, rap, rock, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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