The charts below show information about music preference of the teenagers and the middle-aged perspectively. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The charts below show information about music preference of the teenagers and the middle-aged perspectively.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
The graphs above demonstrate the
music
preference of the
teenagers
and the middle-aged respectively. Both charts depict the distribution of the same categories of
music
, including
rap
music
,
rock
and roll
music
, classical
music
,
country
music
, and alternative.
Overall
,
rap
music
is the most popular, and
country
music
is the least among
teenagers
while
the opposite is true among the middle-aged. For
teenagers
, half reported a preference for
rap
music
, which became the top among all kinds of
music
.
This
was followed by
rock
and roll
music
, which accounted for 19%. A small percentage of
teenagers
favored
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classical
music
and
country
music
, accounting for 2% and 19% respectively.
Besides
, there were one-fourth of
teenagers
preferred other types of
music
. For the middle-aged,
country
music
was the most popular
music
type, chosen by 42% of respondents. The least picked one is
rap
music
, accounting for 6%. Classical
music
and
rock
and roll
music
were
favored
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favoured
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by 28% and 15% respectively,
whereas
the remaining 9% chose
alternative
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an alternative
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. In conclusion, the two pie charts above compare the
music
preferences of
teenagers
and the middle-aged. The preference for
rock
music
is almost the same
while
the proportions of other types of
music
are different between
teenagers
and the middle-aged.
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