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These days people are using the internet for shopping, work and to communicate with others without the need for face-to-face meetings. Do the advantages of this development outweigh its disadvantages?

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It is observed that
people
 have relied on
untact
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intact
 internet so as to do shopping, work and communicate.
This
 essay will demonstrate that the merits of
this
 trend supersede its demerits.
To begin
 with, there are some reasons why face-to-face connection is needed. One of the main reasons for
this
 contention is that the online medium cannot deliver exact information.
For example
, if
people
 communicate through the internet, it is not possible to recognize the non-verbal factors
such
 as an expression and a gesture, which complement the meaning of a conversation.
Furthermore
, when
people
 do online shopping, they can just speculate on the real texture and
colors
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. In spite of the
reason
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 mentioned above, I am of the opinion that non-face-to-face businesses have a variety of advantages. For one thing,
people
 can do what they want where and when they would like, being free from restraint of time and space.
For instance
, working out of home makes a lot of employees’ office hours flexible, improving their quality of life.
Moreover
,
people
 who have the intention of learning
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 do not need to regularly go to a face-to-face class,
instead
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 they can work out late at night through an indirect online class.
Secondly
, the online connection is usually cheaper than the offline one. Case in point,
people
 who live in Seoul can freely communicate with a friend who lives in Berlin in real-time. If they try to physically be connected to a friend, it costs a lot.
In addition
, commonly, online shopping has more reasonable prices rather than brick-and-mortar
store
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. In conclusion, considering all these arguments,
it is clear that
,
although
 some
untact
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intact
contact
 communication has a few disadvantages, the benefits of
this
 phenomenon seem to continue to outbalance the drawbacks.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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