The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012.

The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012.
The graph illustrates the percentage of money spent on health care services in three European
countries
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and two
non European
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countries
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over the year 2002.
Overall
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, the chart demonstrates that the total spending and public spending had simultaneously increased for all the
countries
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.
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However
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in private spending, it is shown to be low for all
countries
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except for
USA
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the USA
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. The graph
represents
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shows
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total spending to be a gradual
increase
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across all the
countries
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from 8% to14%. There
seems
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be a steady
increase
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of 2-4% in public spending as well, the highest being 14% and the lowest around 4.8%.
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, private spending had an abrupt
increase
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for all
countries
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- Japan, Italy, France,
German
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, USA.
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, there is a trend
oberved
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observed
between total spending and public spending. Starting with
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steady
increase
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and
then
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plateau , and
then
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starkly
increase
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a significant percentage.
The
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similar trend is seen in public speaking as well.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, increase with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 6 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Health expenditure
  • Percentage of GDP
  • Trend analysis
  • Economic prosperity
  • Health outcomes
  • Quality of healthcare
  • Allocation of resources
  • Healthcare services
  • Political, social, and economic factors
  • International organizations
  • Government policies
  • Predictive trends
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