Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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A lot of
people
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say that advertisement is actually successful at persuading us to buy goods.
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, other
people
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suppose that it is so regular that we do not pay attention to it. All companies use promotions, use advertisements and it is really effective. When
people
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see the banner,TV advertising or another type of promotion, they start getting interested.They do not need these products,but they were caught by goods production companies. But nowadays ,there are too many ads and
promoting
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that we just do not draw attention. It has become a huge part of our life.We do not head for buying something,after seeing it on TV.So you can say that advertisement does not work,but it pretty
works
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. I consider that we do not draw attention when we see it, but it leaves
print
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a print
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on our consciousness.If we see one thing
everyday
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, we will get interested what is
this
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thing and maybe will buy it.Nowadays commercial needs to expand,needs to get popular and so that the largest number of
people
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learn about your company or services. Thanks to
this
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companies get popular and their goods will sell more .But in my
opinion
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opinion,
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advertising is really effective to
persuades
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us to buy different things from banners.Everyone has
thing
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things
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that they bought because of the advertisement.They can adore it or loathe it,but it is a fact that they have bought it when saw it
on
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the ad .
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this
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reason
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I consider that
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apply
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reclames work,if they are everywhere, if there are banners,
blurbs
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and blurbs
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on every corner.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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