More and more companies are allowing employees to work at home/allowing students to study at home. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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technonlogy
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technology
. It has
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more and more popular for people to work/ study without leaving
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home. there is
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argument
that if
this
trend will have
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or
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negative
impact
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the
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society.
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this
phenomenon. Working remotely can reduce the unnecessary
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on many things,
for example
: the commute
time
between home and workplace or school.
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to the
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the average commute that people spend on travel in the
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metropolitan
city is more than one hour per day, what's more, during the
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there is
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can
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due to
the over
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crowded
public
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transportation
. So
this
period of
time
will be wasted.
In addition
, working remotely will bring
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flexiablity
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flexibility
for the individuals. Especially for the part-
time
students, they will have more
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opportunities
to attend the courses which are not in working hours.
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time
student will usually face the
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that their working
time
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conflicts
with the course
time
. The online course will provide the perfect solution for
this
group of individuals.
On the other hand
, studying in the school or office will
also
have some
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benefits
,
for instance
, it will make
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studying
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and working become much
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efficient
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Because
in school he students and employees will under the supervision
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thier
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their
teachers and
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employer
, which will improve the motivation and
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discipline
.
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, as far as
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concerned
, I believe working or studying remotely will bring
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positive
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. And
this
is the trend of the future. By
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implementing
this
, individuals will have more
time
to enjoy the life and company
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family members.
To sum up
, I believe working and studying remotely will
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benefit
for the development of
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society. especially considering the
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and flexibility.
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