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The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city center from 2003-2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city center from 2003-2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
afore-mentioned
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 line chart demonstrates the
number
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 of crime cases in
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the NewPort
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NewPort
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Newport
 city centre from 2003 to 2012. The types of crime are
burglary
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,
car
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 theft and
robbery
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.
Overall
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,
burglary
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 was the most common crime from 2003 to 2005. The
number
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 of
car
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 thefts was highest in the following years,
while
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robbery
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 was the least common. In 2003, there were about 3400
occurences
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occurrences
 of
burglary
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 in
NewPort
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Newport
 city centre, which was more than the total
number
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 of
car
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 theft and
robbery
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. The burglaries
number
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 continued to increase more sharply than others. It reached its peak at 3500, more than three times the
number
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 of
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robbery
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robberies
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.
However
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, the cases of
burglary
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 dramatically decreased by more than half to 1,300. Meanwhile,
car
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 theft followed
an
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the
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 opposite trend by remaining steady from 2006 to 2008.
Robbery
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 showed a slight increase from 700 to 800 in 2004, followed by a gradual downtrend to 500 in 2008. In the final years, all crimes showed a stable tendency. The city became a safer place because the occurences were kept
undercontrolled
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under control
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, burglary, car, robbery with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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