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The maps below show the changes that have taken place at the seaside town of Templeton between 1990 and 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the changes that have taken place at the seaside town of Templeton between 1990 and 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps below show how the town’s infrastructure increased at the seaside
resort
 of Templeton between 1990 and 2005 In 1990 the
resort
 was a much greener residential area with a
big
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large
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 amount of
trees
 and ordinary houses , but during these 25 years
resort
 changed so much. The main comparison is that most of
trees
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the trees
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 were cut down and too many houses were crushed and new huge
supermarket
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supermarkets
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, multi-family houses ,
factory
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factories
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 and railway
station
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stations
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 replaced them. Whatever a new
industial
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industrial
 area with
factory
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factories
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, railways and homes stand around that fascinating territory. only
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a couples
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couples
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couple
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 of
trees
 remained. These replacements
cool
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are cool
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 for marketing and for guests , but
its
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it's
it is
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 not well that
resort
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the resort
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have
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does have
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 not so many
trees
 for being green 
hotel
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hotels
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.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words resort, trees with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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