The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities
The bar chart compares the proportion of
coffee
and tea consumers
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consumers'
consumer's
behavior
in five Australian areas.
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behaviour
Overall
, in those five different areas, the majority of citizen
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citizens
prone
to go to the café to enjoy Add a missing verb
are prone
the
Correct article usage
apply
coffee
or tea, except Adelaide.
Turning first to Sydney and Melbourne, bought
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buying
coffee
and tea in café was the majority of the population, over 60% compared to around 45% for bought
fresh and instant Wrong verb form
buying
coffee
. Likewise
, people in Brisbane and Hobart also
prefer went
to café, those over 55% and 60%. Change the verb form
to go
However
, the percentage of instant coffee
sold also
significant, Add a missing verb
is also
accounted
around 53% in Brisbane and almost 55% in Hobart.
Wrong verb form
accounting for
In contrast
, the majority people
in Adelaide prefer to Change preposition
of people
bought
instant Change the verb
buy
coffee
accounted
almost 50%, slightly higher than Wrong verb form
accounting for
bought
in café (around 48%). The proportion of people Correct pronoun usage
those bought
bought
fresh Correct pronoun usage
who bought
coffee
was the lowest (around 34%).Submitted by diyolory on
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