The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities

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The bar chart compares the proportion of

coffee

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and tea

consumers

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consumers'

consumer's

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behavior

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in five Australian areas.

Overall

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, in those five different areas, the majority of

citizen

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citizens

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prone

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are prone

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to go to the café to enjoy

the

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apply

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coffee

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or tea, except Adelaide. Turning first to Sydney and Melbourne,

bought

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buying

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coffee

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and tea in café was the majority of the population, over 60% compared to around 45% for

bought

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buying

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fresh and instant

coffee

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, people in Brisbane and Hobart

also

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prefer

went

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to go

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to café, those over 55% and 60%.

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, the percentage of instant

coffee

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sold

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also

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significant,

accounted

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around 53% in Brisbane and almost 55% in Hobart.

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, the majority

people

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of people

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in Adelaide prefer to

bought

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buy

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instant

coffee

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accounted

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accounting for

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almost 50%, slightly higher than

bought

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those bought

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in café (around 48%). The proportion of people

bought

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who bought

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fresh

coffee

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was the lowest (around 34%).

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.

Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, café with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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5
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
15
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

140 words

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survey results
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