The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities

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The bar chart compares the proportion of

coffee

and tea

consumers

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behavior

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in five Australian areas.

Overall

, in those five different areas, the majority of

citizen

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citizens

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prone

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to go to the café to enjoy

the

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coffee

or tea, except Adelaide. Turning first to Sydney and Melbourne,

bought

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coffee

and tea in café was the majority of the population, over 60% compared to around 45% for

bought

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buying

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fresh and instant

coffee

Likewise

, people in Brisbane and Hobart

also

prefer

went

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to café, those over 55% and 60%.

However

, the percentage of instant

coffee

sold

also

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significant,

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around 53% in Brisbane and almost 55% in Hobart.

In contrast

, the majority

people

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of people

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in Adelaide prefer to

bought

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buy

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instant

coffee

accounted

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accounting for

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almost 50%, slightly higher than

bought

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those bought

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in café (around 48%). The proportion of people

bought

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who bought

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fresh

coffee

was the lowest (around 34%).

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5Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
15Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

140 words

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Variety in linking words

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Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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