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The chart below shows the proportion of businesses making e- commerce by industry in Canada Between 2015 and 2019.

The chart below shows the proportion of businesses making e- commerce by industry in Canada Between 2015 and 2019.
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The given bar chart illustrates the percentage of 5 types of businesses that made
e-commerce
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payments
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 in the
industry
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 in Canada from 2015 to 2019.
Overall
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, there were three industries (construction, wholesale and retail trade) which had a slight increase in making
e-commerce
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payments
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 over five
years
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.
On the other hand
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, manufacturing and information and communication experienced a gradual fluctuation from 2015 to 2019. Looking at the details, it can be seen that the construction
industry
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 made
e-commerce
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 at around 20 per cent from 2015.
This
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 figure
then
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 increased to more than 50% after 5
years
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.
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, from 40 % making online
payments
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 in 2015, the entire distribution
industry
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 showed a slight increase of almost 20 % in
e-commerce
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 purchases
at the end
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 of the period. The retail
industry
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 reported that up to 30% of
payments
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 were made online in 2015.
This
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 figure increased dramatically to 50% after one year. After three
years
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, there was a slight increase to almost 60% in 2019. The manufacturing
industry
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,
on the other hand
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, registered as much as 30 % of
e-commerce
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 purchases in 2015 and
then
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 increased sharply to just over 50 % in 2016. The figure
then
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 fell by almost 10% a year later, before rising again to almost 60% in 2015.
Similarly
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, the manufacturing, information and communication industries made the highest number of
e-commerce
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payments
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 over the five
years
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. Starting from 60% in 2015, it increased to 70% in 2016. After that, it remained stable in 2017 and
then
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 increased to more than 70 % before returning to 70 %
at the end
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 of the
last
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 year.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end, on the other hand, similarly".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words e-commerce, payments, industry, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 3 times.
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