The diagram below shows the process of using water to produce electricity. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the process of using water to produce electricity. 

 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The picture shows the process where
water
is used to produce electrical power. The process begins when seawater is heated by the sun and
happening
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evaporation, appearing clouds in the sky.
Next,
these clouds
turns
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into rainy clouds and give the rain. After
,
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rain gathers at
reservoir
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the reservoir
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and through
dam
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the dam
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, it goes to the turbine. In the turbine,
water
pressure converts to electricity and it goes through high voltage cables to the transformer station. With the help of underground cables, electricity goes to houses, factories and hospitals/schools. The
water
in the turbine is directed to a pump where it will return to the reservoir again.
Overall
, hydroelectric power is generated using
water
from the sea and after
procudures
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procedures
procedure
which consists of ten stages, which
at the end
water
returns to the reservoir.
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