Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
It is argued that an increasing number of
individuals
choose to work
for themselves, rather than working
for other companies. Wrong verb form
work
This
essay would argue that the main reason of
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for
this
is that people
feel more free when they are self-employed, while
the main drawbacks are high risk and stress.
On the one hand, people
who have their own business
have more liberty. Fix the agreement mistake
businesses
This
is because when individuals
work
for others, they need to follow rules. But if they are self-employed, they do not need to listen to what others ask them to do, instead
, they are the ones that
tell others what they need to do. Correct pronoun usage
who
Also
, people
are more free because they can work
from where they want and when they want. For example
, normally freelancers of big companies do not go to work
every day, only when there is something urgent or to ensure that everything is in order, while
the other time, they can do other activities.
On the other hand
, self-employed people
are more exhausted. The high competition in the market, make
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makes
people
worry about their business
,
since they are not sure if it will Remove the comma
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success
or not, Replace the word
succeed
also
, they need to look for solutions if there are any problems. Furthermore
becoming a freelancer is very risky. This
is because individuals
need to invest high
amount of money to create their Add an article
a high
business
. People
can go to
bankrupt if the company does not Change preposition
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work
well, and they lose everything they invested. For instance
, many people
who had had a successful business
, fell into bankruptcy from one day to another, losing everything they had and had
a large amount of debts that they needed to pay.
In conclusion, Wrong verb form
having
individuals
prefer to be freelancers because they are more free
, Replace the words
freer
although
there are drawbacks such
as high risk
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high-risk
rate
and Fix the agreement mistake
rates
people
are
more exhausted.Wrong verb form
being
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